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Monday 16 December 2019

Summer Learning Journey: Week 1 Day 1 Activity 1

This week we started on our first activity for week 1. For this activity we had to list 10 foods that we would choose to take on a ocean voyage. I picked food that wouldn't need to be refrigerated, this was quite hard as most of these foods are not really tasty to people.

Wednesday 11 December 2019

Activity 8: When the Rubber Hits the Road

Karlos - I have accomplished being confident while speaking in a crowd. I feel like this is a great achievement because now I can talk without feeling nervous

Jayden - I have accomplished getting better at tennis by the years. I think this a good achievement because I think I can become a professional tennis. 

Giovanni - Winning a reward in the First New Zealand Lego League Competition. This was a great accomplishment for me because it was my first time experiencing.

For the 8th activity we had for the task today was to learn about 3 people's accomplishments. Something I found interesting was Jayden getting better at Tennis and wanting to become a professional tennis player.  

Summer Learning Journey : Week 1 Day 2 Activity 2

For this activity, please think about this issue of the gender pay gap carefully. It is quite controversial (some people agree with it and some people disagree with it).
On your blog, tell us what you think. Is it fair? Why or why not? Be sure to explain exactly why you feel the way that you do.

I think that the gender wage gap (at least in sports) is false, the amount of money that a sport receives is based on the attention that it gathers. Football is the most watched sport in the world, and therefor, its players will earn more money than players of rugby. You might say that it's sexist for women to be paid less than their male counterparts but I say that it's just the factor of attention. The main reason why females are paid less than men is because they're weaker. Men are genetically stronger than women, and that's why whenever a transgender man joins a female league, they'd dominate the competition. Tell me, when the male and female rugby world cups were on; which match lineups would you pay more attention to? What team would you care more about? The reason for male sports being more popular is due to their strength, in a sport like rugby it's far more entertaining to see huge guys crash into each other, than it is to watch smaller women do the same thing.

Monday 9 December 2019

Activity 1: New Zealand Royalty

Today we started on the teaser task for the summer learning journey. The first activity was based about lorde. I needed to research about lorde and list 5 facts about her. The topic of this year summer learning journey is about change makers.

Wednesday 4 December 2019

Kiwi Sport

This week for Kiwi Sport we played Ki o Rahi, in order to play this game you need to be in 2 teams, 1 teams is called Taniwha. Taniwha is the attack team, they have to throw the ball against the defending team. The defending team would block the Taniwha from getting a goal.

Maths / Problem

During this week for maths, there was a challenge. A challenge that required 4 people in a group each, Jayden, Sela, Giovanni, Angela and I worked as a group. First off, we had a budget of $200, we had to use that $200 to survive a whole week with food. This was kinda of difficult because we had to feed each person in our group.




Tennis

This week we had another session of Tennis. Before we got into the actual practice, we were given a warm up to stretch our arms and legs. After the warm up game, he taught us a skill called (volley). It is when you strike the ball before it bounces towards the ground.

Monday 2 December 2019

Market Day

This term PBS planned a market day, each class made their own products. Those products would be sold at school. The currency was tokens, to get tokens you would have to exchange real currency. Our class (LS2) used wasted crayons to create Rainbow Crayons. They were formed as a Butterfly. Most classes were selling plants, Room 1 plants sold extremely fast. After the market day, we came back with $96 dollars. We also spended $6 dollars on plastic bags, so the total amount of our earning was $88 dollars.

Friday 29 November 2019

Atheletics

This week on Wednesday we had athletics day. I qualified for 100m Sprints and 400m Sprints. During athletics, wearing shoes were a requirement which was a huge disadvantage, because I couldn't go to my fullest limit. In 100m sprints I came 4th place, and for 400m sprints I either came 3rd of fourth.

William Shakespeare

On friday we were visited by the pop-up globe workers. They gave us information about william shakespeare which was interesting. William Shakespeare would always try to make his sentence rhyme. William Shakespeare also did something called fourth wall, fourth wall is when the narrator includes the audience. One of Williams shakespeare acts called macbeth was extremely cursed. In William Shakespeare's tragedy acts, there is always a death. 

Thursday 28 November 2019

Thanks Giving

The Mayflower sailed out of Plymouth Harbour in England on September 6, 1620. The small sailing ship carried 102 pilgrims across the Atlantic ocean for 65 days to plimouth in the New World . They had religious freedom now but life was hard, as they had to build or  make everything they needed for survival from scratch. The winter made life hard and many people lost their lives, crops failed to grow and spirits were low. Some of the wampanoag tribe helped by giving advice and by bringing food. That next year the pilgrims harvest was much better. To celebrate they hunted for meat and turned many of their crops into delicious food,  and invited the wampanoag tribe to join them in a feast of thanksgiving.

The Mayflower sailed out of Plymouth Harbour in England on September 6, 1620. The small sailing ship carried 102 pilgrims across the Atlantic ocean for 65 days to plimouth in the New World . They had religious freedom now but life was hard, as they had to build or  make everything they needed for survival from scratch. The winter made life hard and many people lost their lives, crops failed to grow and spirits were low.

Photo by Jxson CC BY 2.0

Wednesday 20 November 2019

A Journey with a Shoe Life

My mouth was wide open, only to be filled by a huge stinky socks. I liked my hair messy, until tied my owner tied it tight. I didn’t really like him because he kept getting gum, dirt and lots of things on my bottom. Everytime he kicked a ball, it would hurt my face especially my nose. When I got exhausted, he just kept getting stinkier. My owner was annoying, he was so fast he always got my hair untangled. Getting back home was a relief, I could just sit down and sleep. As my owner grabs me, he throws me to the garbage, as I was falling I saw another pair of flash shoe.

 This week for Writing, we were giving Objects inhumane quality (Personification). As for the object, we chose a shoe. Te Pounamu and I were paired up. This was also a challenge because we had to face back to back, no communication was allowed either. 


Greek Mythology

This week for reading, we had to choose a Horrible Histories book. When chosen, we read the whole book, then we made a DLO sharing the information we gathered. Te Pounamu and I chose the Groovy Greeks. Talking about the greeks had a number choice to choose from, the spartans, athens, trojan and Greek God. We chose to talk about the greek gods because it shared some interesting facts.

Tuesday 19 November 2019

Transformation


 This tuesday math's was quite fun. For maths we have been learning about the different type of skills for Transformation. There 4 type of Transformation, rotation, translation, enlargement and reflection. As you can see this Presentation gives an example of all 4.

Friday 15 November 2019

Food Print

Yesterday on Thursday we were visited by Michal Garvey, who was a friend of Mr Ogilvie. She is a small business owner who planned for 2 years, and has only opened her business recently for 6 months. Her business is based on Food Waste, 1/3 of Foods that is produced is wasted every year (1.3 Billion). 

Friday 1 November 2019

Tech / Wood Work

Today on friday we were continuing on with our wood work. I was working on a Skateboard, I was making it for my collection. I wasn't make that progress because the the measurements were incorrects and usually the line were not Straight, but eventually I finally did it. Next session I will try do better with my Measurements.


Tuesday 22 October 2019

Current Events: Summarising The Main Ideas

This week for Current Events, our challenge was to search the internet, and find an article that we found interesting. With this information we then found keywords, 20 important words, 6 of those words that are most important, and then make a 5 sentence summary about the text. Once we had written our summaries the final challenge was to turn those 5 sentences into 5 10 syllables sentences. I worked with Alex, Joseph, and Karlos for this activity. This was an interesting challenge, and I enjoyed learning about this new found organism. If you would like to read the article I have linked it below.

Link To Article Here:


Keywords from the title
Keywords from 
Sub- Headings
New words I need to look up
Blob, Organism and Solve.
There are no sub-headings.
We didn’t find any words we didn’t know.

Write down 20 important words from the text 
Blob, Organism, Solve, Yellowish, Scientists, Paris, Zoological, Park, Animal, Fungus, Memory, Maze, Form, Searched, Regenerate, Slime, Merge, Behaviour, Consumes and Researchers.
Chose the 6 most important words.
Blob, Researchers, Memory, Regenerate, Animal and Fungus.
Use your words to write a 5 sentence summary.
Researchers in Paris have discovered a blob. They aren’t sure if it’s an animal or a fungus. They don’t even know if it’s in between. It has a memory and can regenerate from being cut in half in two minutes. The Blob has such an interesting behaviour.

Now using the words you wrote down summarise the text in 5 sentences. Once you have done this turn each of your sentences into sentences with exactly 10 syllables.

People in Paris discovered a blob. - 10 syllables
Is the blob an animal or fungus. - 10 syllables
They don’t even know if it’s in between. - 10 syllables
With memory it can regenerate. - 10 syllables
The Blob has got such a weird behaviour. - 10 syllables

Friday 27 September 2019

Water Filtes

 
This week and last week for inquiry LS2 was learning about water filters and how to make them, we needed to find out what water filters need to work and how we could put the filters together.  All of the groups used plastic bottles, sand, rocks and charcoal to try and dilute dirty water. Although none of the groups completely filtered the water, some of them managed to get lighter coloured water.

Tuesday 24 September 2019

Rugby Advertisement


This week for writing, we were making Advertisement for Rugby. We had 2 choices, to either make a video or make a poster. We first planned to make a video, but as time sped up we chose to make a poster. We also chose to use a Rugby Ball as our advertisement. We tried to use some qualities that advertisement had so that it is really relatable. 

Rugby World Cup


This week out theme was about maths and our topic was about the Rugby World Cup. There were 7 challenges, most of them were quite difficult. After completing all the challenges, we choose one of those challenges and make a DLO about it. We chose the last challenge which the question was: If all the stadia are sold out each time then what will be the total number spectators for all the pool matches combined?

Wednesday 11 September 2019

International Current Events

This week for reading Aung Naing, Joseph, Jack, Julian and I worked together to fill out a google map with international events. We needed to search through different news websites to find stories that fit the current event criteria. Our story for oddity is twin pandas being born in Belgium and for impact, bush fires.

Wednesday 4 September 2019

Provocation and Opinion



A provocation is an action or speech that triggers strong feelings about a topic. Recently a major supermarket chain announced it will no longer sell energy drinks to people under 16. My opinion is recorded in my DLO that shows both perspectives. What is your opinion and why?

Exploring our national current events

News editors make decision every day about which current event stories they will run. We explored the different types of current events that are happening in NZ, thought about why the story made news and plotted the location on an google maps. I was working collaboratively with Julian, Te Pounamu and Jayen. 

Explanation: Should NZ ban plastic straws?

                                          Should NZ ban plastic


Plastic Straws are actually simple to fair, they're small, quite useful for drinking as well. But sometimes usefulness and simplicity can cause something so dangerous. Hi my name is Joseph and by now you should know the boundaries of what plastic straws can cause. Plastic straws are a bigger deal than you think. Some turtles live they're live with a plastic straw in their nostrils, but for what reason. Well you see it is caused from us people, people that are capable of thinking of their own actions.


“Eww Yuck” is a common reaction I’d see if there was a photo of a plastic straw shoved into a turtle's nose. Well I find that sad, to see a plastic straw stuck in a turtle's nose is like hearing it scream help. Some people say that banning straws won’t make a difference, they might be true... in your own opinion. But making a small difference in the present could make a big difference in the future. Tell me what you achieve from throwing plastic straws? Do you become luxurious and full with gold?


Apparently some California restaurants have banned plastic straws. For the past 10 years New Zealand have been collecting plastic straws throughout the beaches. It is said that there are 65,000 plastic straws. Imagine in 30 years we kept on littering plastic straws, there would be approximately 195,000 plastic straw which is a lot of straws for a small countrie.

Not Finished Yet






Friday 30 August 2019

Food Tech

This week was our last session for Food Tech. This time we made (Thai Fish Cake). This dish was extremely delicious but was spicy at the same time. I think that if we decreased the amount of chili flakes we added it would've turned out better. The ingredients we used were Brown Sugar, Fish Sauce, Onion, Coriander, Boneless Fish, Canola Oil and Chili Flakes. What I found difficult was to stabilize the fish cake in its form. What I found easy was cutting the coriander into small pieces. The thing I need to work on is adding down the correct measurements for some ingredients. Thank you Mrs Hecker for the cookings. Im currently look forward for our next rotation.

Thursday 22 August 2019

Persuasive Speeches


LI: To write a speech that persuades others to think the way you do.

Last week Panmure Bridge School had a Speech Competition. Only three people from LS2 were allowed to enter the competition. The three people chosen from LS2 had to have good eye contact, loud voice that is clear and good writing enough to hook in the audience. The people who didn't have enough confident would say their speech to a small group of people. 


Hello my name is Joseph, I've been wondering how life would be if I went 50 years into the future, would the environment be healthy or would it be flooded with chaos? I think that the future reflects on us, whether we treat it with respect or we destroy it by acting selfishly. How do you think our world will end up, as we are currently treating it?


Paragraph 2 - About 1 million marine animals are dying from plastic each year because of our careless decisions. Just imagine if in the future the sea was empty with nothing but the reflection of the sun. Would you be proud? By acting in our own ways we have been selfish, careless, and ungrateful. We have been selfish by littering, we have been careless for not recognizing the situation we have caused and we have been ungrateful for not realizing the gift of environment we have been given. This proves that no human is perfect in this world.


Plastic… it may be a simple material but it can cause many disasters. Burning plastic creates polluted air as your releasing poison chemicals. Inhaling polluted air can cause damage to health whether its human or animal. Even if you throw plastic into the ocean, it’ll kill tons of turtles, Just imagine dreaming about poor sea animals dying right before our eyes as we continue to litter plastic, especially turtles they suffocate to death when consuming plastic bags or can cause physical distress, let's not blame the plastic, let's blame ourselves.


Learning about what plastic can cause has taught me a lot of things. Just because plastic could be something small in the present doesn’t mean it could be big in the future. The future is in our hands, so why not make a better tomorrow for the next generations.

I mean most of the people don’t even care if they litter, little do they know what the future lies ahead for their children and grandchildren. STOP LITTERING!!

Friday 9 August 2019

Swimming

This week on thursday we went swimming, we learnt lots of new techniques during the session. The technique I like the most was the stream line. The point of swimming wasn't mainly about having fun but was mostly for water safety. We were asked by our instructors (James) would we rather have a broken leg or a broken head. If I accidently fell into a river, I would rather face my leg towards the rocks then than my head. I could live with a broken leg, but with a broken head I would suffer or even die. Water safety lesson could help you in different kind of situations. After we had to swim across the water without touching the ground, this was fun because there were lots of techniques I learnt.




Monday 5 August 2019

Slide Show/ Motat


This week our school went to Motat to learn about steam which is our inquiry topic for term 3. This slide show, shows us what we did at motat. At motat we had to make a car out of cardboard, battery packs, skewer motor, fans and straws. Which was fun as we had to work collaborative and share our ideas. We explored lots of different places at motat.

Friday 2 August 2019

Kiwi Can - Emotions

This week for Kiwi Can our topic was Emotions. While talking about emotion we had to group up with people and create an act that was based on what we were given. Each group had different acts because we were given different emotions. Our act event was hosted at the zoo, we also added lions to scare the children to try show what caused the kid to be frightened and to show it was at the zoo.

Tuesday 25 June 2019

Rhythm Interactives Vist to PBS


This week we had an special visitor named Johnny, Johnny played music that had important messages. Johnny hosted the Drum Show in the hall, which the whole school participated. He played music from a drum known as djembe, which we followed the beat of his drumming. As we were drumming we also sang small phrases that had important messages. I found this quite fun because it was funny and really loud which allowed me to go all out of enjoyment. Before the Drumming Show started, the year 8 & 7 had to collect a junior and help them with what to do in the show. After the Drum show ended, Johnny was giving out drums to PBS if we had given the correct answer.

Thursday 20 June 2019

The Life Jacket Disaster/ Narrative



“Elijah are you bored?”
“Yeah Kind of Spencer."
"Have you heard of the story called Life Jacket Importance, Elijah?"
“No, Why Spencer?”
“Let me tell you the story Elijah.”

It all started with a stormy night when the clouds were dripping tear drops. There was a kid named Jenesis who was soaking wet. At school he was usually naughty which is why his dad wanted him to change. Jenesis', dad Michael, waited for an opportunity to take him fishing to see if he could reason him as to why he’s always so naughty.

When Jenesis got in trouble, he was sent back home. Michael saw an opportunity and took it. As they went fishing, Jenesis' attitude began to change and his angry face began to fade away as his smile got bigger. Suddenly the smile changed. A huge wave pushed them in the direction of a rock they couldn’t avoid launching both of them into the water. It was like the waves just reached up with their huge arms and hugged them closely. A little bit like when your mum hugs you so tight you can’t breathe. As they dropped into the water, the boy floated as he had a life jacket on but his dad was sinking into the sea.

“Hey Spencer did Michael drown?”

The boy was screaming help as his dad was at the fate of death until he saw his dad swimming towards him. Jenesis looked around his surroundings and saw his dad's life jacket floating in the water. His fear was overtaken by his smile as he started to swim towards his dad's life jacket.

He began to cry. If only he could remember the swimming lessons he learnt at school which he disrespected so much. He reached the life jacket and he threw to the position of his dad. Micheal reached up in the air and grabbed onto it while breathing heavily. Jenesis was so thankful that his dad was alive.

After the disaster that happened Jenesis even went to say sorry to his school.


Tuesday 18 June 2019

Ballet

This week we had a special guest named Chloe, she flew from Wellington to Auckland. Chloe was teaching us ballet, she taught us dance moves that were included with our choreography dance we were going to perform. This was the first time I experienced how ballet felt, it was quite difficult as you sometimes had to be flexible to perform a specific move, but it was usually fun. What I found cool was how we had to make our own pose during the choreography dance. What was really difficult at some point was kicking up in the air and rolling around the ground. Thank you Chloe for teaching us ballet and for making it fun.


Monday 17 June 2019

Waltzing Matilda

This week for reading, we talked about the main idea about Waltzing Matilda. We also had to back up our main idea by writing down true details from the text. We then made a summary DLO about Waltzing Matilda. In this DLO we added 20 important words, which we then narrowed down to 6 most important words out of the 20. Using those 6 words, we had to make a summary about the poem, Waltzing Matilda. The poem was about a Swagman who stole a sheep from a farmer, which the farmer than called the troops to catch him. The Swagman was well aware that the troops was under his tail, until he escaped them and was never seen again.



Thursday 13 June 2019

Maths Vocabulary

Today for maths we were learning about maths vocabulary, as an example we needed to think of all the different greetings that people use, from hi to namaste and even slang like gidday. Afterwards we needed to fill in a table with the maths related words next to it, in order to decide on where the words should go Te Pounamu, Joseph and I talked to each other and recorded our conversation with screencastify.

Thursday 6 June 2019

Literary Devices

This week for reading we were challenged by Mrs Anderson to make a DLO about Literary Devices but only on a google document. This challenge was quite hard because usually I make a DLO on google drawing which google drawing has lots of creative things. In our DLO we showed explanations, examples and a picture to give the reader a big thinking.

Here is the link to my DLO.

Friday 24 May 2019

Stardome Trip

On Thursday Night the LS2 Year 7/8 went to the stardome observatory. The purpose of this event was mainly to learn about space. We left school at 5:30 and left the observatory at 7:20. There is lot of information about planets which you can explore and learn all around. We were first got introduced to a animation which was casted and shown by Tobias. This animation showed us how constellations work, constellations are stars that are formed to its identified figure, there are different mythology meaning, different cultures have different beliefs. They also showcased a close up look towards Jupiter and Saturn.     

Thursday 23 May 2019

Introducing Penguins

This week we gathered information about penguin, then we used that information for our planning. The reason why we planned, is because we were trying a challenge, which was, we could only use information gathered from our planning to make a infographic. The three main three property we used were Appearance, Diet and Habitat.

Introducing Penguins


Is it just me or are we both clueless for not realizing that a weird walking animal named penguin is a type of bird. Penguins are different to ordinary birds as they can not fly or glide, they don’t even have Wings and are completely flightless. Penguins are aquatic creatures and have flippers to swim they're way through the water which is often called (rocket). They’re often hunted by sea lions, some may have had brutal deaths. The scientific name for penguins are recognised as Spheniscidae.

Penguins are bigger and taller than normal birds, nearly all type of penguins have an black back and white in the front as feathers.

As all birds have, a penguin has a yellow beak. Some penguins even have patterns, like the humboldt penguin. They even have flippers.

The emperor penguin is considered the tallest and heaviest among all penguins. The smallest penguin is called the little penguin.


Penguin life is truly sad being the favourite food of an Leopard sea Lion. (Sea Lion)

Penguins mainly eat fish, but can also consume Squid, Krill and Crustacean as an diet.

Crustacean is a Type of Animal that lives in the water and is a type of aquatic. A common thing people do, is misunderstand Crustacean for an prawn.


“Never knew a type of bird lived in antarctica”  “me either”, “I’d expect any type of bird frozen to death by the time the clock has past 30 minutes”
Antarctica is a freezing place (ice biome) it contains lots of high ice structures and spices well known as penguins.

Antarctica is not the only habitat where penguins take on, there are many countries where penguins live in, but they are usually different types.

Tuesday 21 May 2019

Night Light


This term for reading we were reading books about space which is our topic for inquiry. We read lots of different books like, The Problem with Pluto, Return Ticket, Please!, Night Light and a few more options. There were also 6 main responses, each response had different challenges for us to use the information we gathered by the text. We also had to comment on people's responses to learn how to have a Dialogic Conversation. As you can see the DLO that I have created is a challenge from 1 of 6 selections of responses.

Thursday 9 May 2019

Kiwican

This week at kiwican, our term 2 topic was focused on Integrity. An example of integrity would be setting up an good example when no one's looking. Then we had an roleplay of what honesty looks like. There were 4 groups, each group had different ideas. Our group had an wallet as our idea, our role play, was a guy who lost his wallet while going to the shops. Then a random man picked up his wallet and gave it back to him. Telling the truth to your friends will help you earn their trust, or it will help with connections. The thing I found interesting is that owning up to the truth rather than hiding it will prevent a bigger consequence.

Wednesday 8 May 2019

Place Value Partitioning

As you can see this DLO shows the strategy of place value to solve addition problems. During our maths session we practiced our place values by answering word questions and addition problem. When I was answering the words question I had to look for the maths so that I knew what numbers to work with. What I found interesting is that this strategy is really useful against addition questions and not useful with multiplication, this had shown me that different strategies are useful for different maths question. 

Thursday 11 April 2019

Inquiry - Continents Of The World

Today we have been given an interesting challenge by our teacher. This challenge was to create a DLO in ten minutes about the different continents in the world, and the countries that live among those continents. Once we had created the DLO, we then could find at least 3 interesting facts about the different continents. The reason as to why we did this challenge was to expand our general knowledge about the world and different continents. For this activity I worked with Joseph and we had a lot of fun finding facts, and finding information.

Thursday 21 March 2019

Blog Post Analysis/Year/Month


This blog post analysis was created on a google sheet, it shows how many blog posts I have posted every year and month. In 2015 I blogged 108 and in 2016 I blogged 68 blog posts, that shows that I have blogged in some years less and some years more. I also showed the layout of how I got my average blog post a year. What I found interesting is that there was a pattern going on each year, in 2015 it was over 100 which is a three digit number, until 2016 it went to 68 which is a 2 digit number, which means it goes to 3 digit number to 2 digit number and repeats again in the same order.

Friday 15 March 2019

Stretching a Sentence

Have you ever wanted a detailed sentence? This DLO shows how to stretch a sentence, the purpose of stretching a sentence is to add more details. I also have a written example to show how it's laid out.

WildBoy/Brando Yelavich


As I read this book, it had many incredible things such as him traveling around the whole New Zealand coastline to donate charity, many tips about survival skills and important life lessons. This DLO shows a summarized text about a teenage boy named Brando Yelavich.

Monday 11 March 2019

Writing Sample/Buddy Check

Last week, we had to look over at each other's writing sample, for this purpose, we needed to be with a buddy who could give us feedback. My partner was Julian, Julian and I checked each other writing sample, we also had give an honest rating to 1 to 7, and there was 6 different topics. The 6 topics were Punctuation, Vocabulary, Organisation, Sentence Structure, Structure and Language and Ideas.



Punctuation
Vocab
Organisation
Sentence Structure
Structure and Language
Ideas
Self
R3
R4
R5
R3
R4
R4
Buddy
R4
R3
R5
R3
R3
R4
    
(Punctuation)
I need to use semicolon, exclamation to show how I am feeling in a Idea, question marks to show Im asking a question, aprosthe and colons..

(Vocab)
I need use metaphor, similes, adjectives, noun and personification to add ideas to my text

(Organisation) I need to work on organizing my paragraph correctly and need to link my ideas.

(Sentence Structure) I need to work on my writing formal and need to use complex and simple sentences more often.

(Structure and Language) The structure of my writing needs to be worked on make sense to reader.

(Ideas)
My ideas are helpful as it can give people clear idea of topics



(Punctuation)
He needs to work on using punctuation such as (exclamation mark) to show a similar emotion as anger towards a message, (question marks) to show his sentence is a question, (speech marks) to show when someone is speaking and colons.

(Vocab)
He need to work on the type of sentences he uses for an example (Similes and (Metaphor)

(Organisation) He needs to work on organising his paragraph and need to improve his paragh linking.

(Sentence Structure)
He need to work on using simple sentences more often as well as complex.

(Sentence and Language) He needs to work on making his writing simple to read.

(Ideas) He needs to work on making his Ideas useful.


Have you ever seen a Plastic Bags cause a Huge Problem?
The problem with this environment is that Plastic Bags are littered by people, this huge problem of plastic bags has caused the death of sea creatures. This is really unfortunate to Sea Turtles as some have suffered with unequal turtle shells due to the Plastic Bag attached to they're neck and shell.


This could extinct different types of turtles. Plastic Bags have also has caused over 1 million sea animals to die including sea Turtles. The other problem about Plastic Bags is that it absorbs the oxygen of food source.

This is why shops are banning Plastic Bags which is a really good idea to avoid sea creatures suffering. You can stop this problem by using a used Plastic Bag, although even if you avoid this problem, plastic bags take 400 years to break down. Imagine the plastic bags still in the ocean and waiting for a turtle to comeby.