Writing Sample/Buddy Check

Last week, we had to look over at each other's writing sample, for this purpose, we needed to be with a buddy who could give us feedback. My partner was Julian, Julian and I checked each other writing sample, we also had give an honest rating to 1 to 7, and there was 6 different topics. The 6 topics were Punctuation, Vocabulary, Organisation, Sentence Structure, Structure and Language and Ideas.

	Punctuation	Vocab	Organisation	Sentence Structure	Structure and Language	Ideas
Self	R3	R4	R5	R3	R4	R4
Buddy	R4	R3	R5	R3	R3	R4

    

	(Punctuation) I need to use semicolon, exclamation to show how I am feeling in a Idea, question marks to show Im asking a question, aprosthe and colons.. (Vocab) I need use metaphor, similes, adjectives, noun and personification to add ideas to my text (Organisation) I need to work on organizing my paragraph correctly and need to link my ideas. (Sentence Structure) I need to work on my writing formal and need to use complex and simple sentences more often. (Structure and Language) The structure of my writing needs to be worked on make sense to reader. (Ideas) My ideas are helpful as it can give people clear idea of topics
	(Punctuation) He needs to work on using punctuation such as (exclamation mark) to show a similar emotion as anger towards a message, (question marks) to show his sentence is a question, (speech marks) to show when someone is speaking and colons. (Vocab) He need to work on the type of sentences he uses for an example (Similes and (Metaphor) (Organisation) He needs to work on organising his paragraph and need to improve his paragh linking. (Sentence Structure) He need to work on using simple sentences more often as well as complex. (Sentence and Language) He needs to work on making his writing simple to read. (Ideas) He needs to work on making his Ideas useful.

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